Saturday, October 10, 2015

In Defense of Shutting Up

Here's a piece I wrote by the name of "In Defense of Shutting Up". Written more to be performed than read, this is a poem that takes some liberties with rhyme and verse. I chose it because of this, and also because it tackles a very common issue in a light-hearted tone. I really like how this turned out in the end, and it feels smoother now that I removed tonal cues that are used when presenting. This definitely isn't one of the best pieces if you're looking at prose and all that, but it is one of my favorites.

In Defense of Shutting Up

There's a girl in a sweatshop and she's only nine
She's the one that made my shoes, sobbing all the time
Wants to take a break, but that'd be a crime

Yet you're saying you hate school, writings rants on your Tumblr blog
While you're taking a bite from your freshly butchered hog
Relaxing on a seat, made from a fine oak log

So let's try something new, why don't you?
It'll help, I promise. It's true
Believe me, this isn't coming out of the blue.

Just shut up.
Zip it, be quiet, shut it. It doesn't matter. Just shut up.
Keep on talking and I might erupt

Just think before you speak
So your statement isn't weak
So your life doesn't seem bleak
So if you have an IQ level greater than a sheep
Stop letting your thoughts constantly leak

I shouldn't have to say it
I absolutely hate it
How we've come to the point where we can't appreciate the quiet

Please, this is coming from the heart
It's not a science, it's not an art
It's a simple act.
Just shut up. 


  1. I like this, Ryan. I like the rhyming and the way it looks and the title. Good job. Seriously.

  2. Come for the rhythmic quality, stay for the deep and honest meaning

  3. I really like this poem because it describes a cultural phenomenon that seems to pop up everywhere. Everyone today seems to have a perpetual victim complex, when in reality, you're stupid and you should shut up. If we all collectively decide to just shut up, hopefully humanity can reach heights never conceived of before.

  4. I like the repetition of the word 'so' as an anaphora in one of your stanzas. I also like how you break away from the rhyming in the last stanza to show emphasis on the theme. (The word theme being used lightly due to the 'deep' idea being sent here.)

  5. I have no words, this is amazing and I love it all just connected...

  6. Your poem was so good, and I love how you added in your sarcastic personality.

  7. I really like your deep, interesting topic. Your poem was good.

  8. This poem was really good, and I like how it all flowed and connected well. It also definitely shows your personality.

  9. The idea of making certain people shut up for the good of a whole is a good idea and should be implemented.